Today we practiced recrafting a piece of writing
“yeah” I said happily to myself. I was nearly there. I sprinted to the finish line and made myself happy. I had a drink and then I had a rest. Looking down at my pretty purple and black shoes, it was all muddy and yucky.
Finishing the race I felt terrible because I hadn’t caught up with my friends. Finally I looked down at my purple and black shoes, they were like dark chocolate.
So I had a drink and watched the year 7 and 8 race. I wondered who would come first.
That sound VERY HOT when you sprint all the way to
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